My holiday!
On my holiday I’m going to play some hockey and I can’t wait to see the ice shining like a diamonds, and the feeling when you are flying forward on that crystal clear ice. To see my team mates working their ass out for a goal against our opponents. I can’t wait to see a mountain covered with a lot of smooth powder in front of my snowmobile. I am longing to see my dear friends which I haven’t seen since the Christmas holiday, and my lovely family that I’ve missed a lot. My family has got a new dog too which I can’t wait to see either, because it looked so cute and sweet on the pictures. I also misses my cute and nice grandparents with more.
Well done on using the descriptive words. Future tense OK, but you didn't keep it up throughout the whole text. Focus for next time: Stick to the task.
